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I.O.V.W.C.S.F.C. Plus 1 is P


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I.O.V.W.C.S.F.C. Plus 1 is P

I.O.V.W.C.S.F.C. Plus 1 is P

I.O.V.W.C.S.F.C. Plus 1 is P

I.O.V.W.C.S.F.C. Plus 1 is P

 

IDEAS: through details, your main ideas.

ORGANIZATION: how it fits together.

VOICE: It describes your unique style.

With your WORD CHOICE: your clarity gets better.

SENTENCE FLUENCY: Let your words find the rhythm.

CONVENTIONS: You need to make things technically correct.

PRESENTATION: If it don’t look nice, I might not see, I might walk right past a future New-, Future Newberry.

 

I.O.V.W.C.S.F.C. Plus 1 is P

I.O.V.W.C.S.F.C. Plus 1 is P

 

IDEAS: through details, your main ideas.

ORGANIZATION: how it fits together.

VOICE: It describes your unique style.

With your WORD CHOICE: your clarity gets better.

SENTENCE FLUENCY: Let your words find the rhythm.

CONVENTIONS: You need to make things technically correct.

PRESENTATION: If it don’t look nice, I might not see, I might walk right past a future New-, Future Newberry.

 

I.O.V.W.C.S.F.C. Plus 1 is P

I.O.V.W.C.S.F.C. Plus 1 is P

 

Fundamental writing traits that writers, that writers need to know. 

That writers, writers need to know.

Fundamental writing traits that writers, that writers need to know. 

That writers, writers need to know.

 

I.O.V.W.C.S.F.C. Plus 1 is P

 

 

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Feedback Sandwich


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Gimme gimme gimme some feedback (some feedback)

Gimme gimme gimme some feedback (some feedback)

Now hop to your right (Some feedback)

Now hop to your left (Some feedback)

Give someone a high five (some feedback)

Gimme gimme gimme some feedback 

 

Feedback is like a sandwich. Start with something positive,

something constructive in the middle, it’s tasty.

End with something positive (End with something positive.)

 

Feedback is like a sandwich. Start with something positive,

something constructive in the middle, it’s tasty.

End with something positive (End with something positive.)

 

Chorus

 

Feedback is like a sandwich. Start with something positive,

something constructive in the middle, it’s tasty.

End with something positive (End with something positive.)

 

Feedback is like a sandwich. Start with something positive,

something constructive in the middle, it’s tasty.

End with something positive (End with something positive.)

 

Gimme gimme gimme some feedback.

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Chop it Out


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Put your hands up like a pair of scissors

Let me hear you clap, now chop it out

Put your hands up like a pair of scissors

Let me hear you clap, now chop it out

 

Dream a story up, write a story down

Pencil to the paper, write a story down.

Take your first draft, read it out loud

It doesn’t serve a purpose, then you gotta chop it out

 

Chop it out now. Chop it out now.

Chop it out now. Chop it out now.

Chop it out now. Chop it out now.

 

Put your hands up like a pair of scissors

Let me hear you clap, now chop it out

Put your hands up like a pair of scissors

Let me hear you clap, now chop it out

 

Dream a story up, write a story down

Pencil to the paper, write a story down.

Take your first draft, read it out loud

It doesn’t serve a purpose, then you gotta chop it out

 

Chorus

 

Put your hands up like a pair of scissors

Let me hear you clap, now chop it out

Put your hands up like a pair of scissors

Let me hear you clap, now chop it out

 

Put your hands up like a pair of scissors

Let me hear you clap, now chop it out

Put your hands up like a pair of scissors

Let me hear you clap, now chop it out

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What Could Be Better?


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WHAT COULD BE BETTER?

What could be better..?

That’s what we ask 

when we revise.

What could be better..?

Improve the story 

you’ve devised.

Go on and write it down!

 

My story’s got 3 little pigs. 

A big bad wolf trying to 

blow down houses made 

out of straw and sticks, 

which were no problem 

until he found that last house

 was made out of bricks. 

That hungry wolf now had a 

task. He was a huffin’ and a 

puffin,’ down, which isn’t bad, 

but have you asked…

 

What could be better?

What if the pigs were 

chimpanzees?

What could be better..?

They’d make their houses 

in the trees!

 

Maybe I’ll change the big 

bad wolf to something. 

After all… how could he 

climb high? Maybe a robot 

on a trampoline, who’s not 

so bad… maybe polite!

Perhaps the wolf is a giraffe, 

with a long a neck and 

purple spots. The only way 

to make his spots turn brown

is eating chimpanzees 

for lunch.

 

CHORUS

 

The first chimp’s house could 

be made out of origami.

The second chimp’s of 

rainbow looms.

What could be better than a 

huffin’ and a puffin’?

Maybe the giraffe could… 

sing tunes!

Its singing voice would be 

so terrible that the walls 

could come falling down!

The third chimp’s house 

could be a magical Lego 

castle that’s… underground!

 

What could be better?

The chimpanzees now 

safe and sound!

What could be better?

I can’t forget to 

write it down!

Go on and write it down!

 

The second write is 

consistently better than 

the first.

Your choice is a question: 

make it better or leave 

it worse?

Does your dialogue contain 

everything that you wish..?

Do you start off with a bang? 

A hook your reader can’t miss?

Is it better, or the best? 

Are you proud of your work?

Settle for nothing less than 

being 100 percent sure!

Revising is the best step 

if you’re up to the task. 

When you think you’re finished 

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Words Matter


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WORDS MATTER

Think about what you mean.

Think about what you write down or say.

Think about pieces that you’ve chosen to build up your ideas.

 

Think about what you mean.

Think about what you write down or say.

Think about pieces that you’ve chosen to build up your ideas.

 

Communicate

Articulate

 

Communicate

Articulate

 

Take responsibility

I choose the words, no they don’t choose me

Take responsibility

I choose precisely because 

 

Words Matter (x8)

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